Tone
As you think about organizing your work, whether fiction or nonfiction, consider
your audience and the tone you need.
your audience and the tone you need.
Academic works
require
a precision regarding fact
and
citation, but are often
nuanced, using longer, more complicated sentences than other forms would require. A children’s
book,
on the other
hand, requires simpler,
less nuanced,
language and sentence structure. Science books written for a popular market, need to have the feel (pacing and
style) of
a novel,
but the rigor of
the
science
they represent.
Sentence
Sentences can be
simple
or complex: Nine sentences, ninety-eight words:
that’s ten
words per
sentence.
Whereas:
On the other hand, when I briefly speak to you of the Gothic school, with reference to delineation, I mean
the
entire and much more
extensive range
of schools extending
from the earliest art in Central Asia and Egypt
down
to our
own
day
in India and
China:—schools
which
have been content to
obtain
beautiful
harmonies of
colour
without any representation
of light; and
which
have, many of them, rested in such imperfect expressions of form as could be so obtained; schools
usually in some
measure
childish, or
restricted
in intellect, and similarly
childish or
restricted
in their philosophies or faiths: but contented in the restriction; and in the more powerful races, capable
of advance
to nobler
development
than the Greek schools, though the consummate
art
of Europe has
only been accomplished
by the union
of both.
(John Ruskin, Lectures on Art) is one sentence in 138 words.
It is hard to find
Ruskin’s style easy—an entire book of it is an
acquired taste—but sometimes
a long sentence is
necessary. Use sentence style, length, and structure to
move the reader through
your
work. Cleaving
to sameness is deadly
dull.
Paragraph
Like
the sentence, a paragraph can be one or a thousand words. Paragraphs represent a relatively complete thought
opening with a topic sentence, followed by its development, ending with a conclusion that also acts as a transitional sentence, leading to the next paragraph. A solid, two-
page, single paragraph will be harder to read than if it is broken into discrete, smaller, sentence groupings. To find
the appropriate points where a new paragraph can start may take some rewriting and if a paragraph must be
long, then accept
that and don’t
artificially break
it up.
While you should
resist
changing
your
tone, varying the sentences and paragraphs makes
your
work more accessible
and
lively.
Pacing
Pacing is
the
manipulation of
time.
If you tell your story
in short, declarative,
sentences,
it’s over in a few pages. It could be an exciting communication, but it won’t engage the reader. This might be how you describe a near traffic accident that happened on your way home from work:
I was on 180km/hr driving
home. I saw a
truck in the oncoming lane throwing off sparks. Suddenly its rear wheel broke loose. It passed the truck and bounced across the median towards me. I slammed on the brakes. It passed
in
front of me by maybe twenty feet. Phew! That was close!
It’s not a book. It’s not even a short story. But it
was exciting. It
could
be a scene in your story, but
it cannot be
told
like
that. For example:
You would set it up
like this:
Your day was one meeting after another, phone calls and problems. You might repeat a
bit of dialogue from an endless meeting with the CEO, who had nothing to say. It was late when you left the office. All you could think of was getting home.
You could describe the scene like this:
It was dusk, the lights of the oncoming cars flash across your windshield. The highway curved through the hilly landscape. Alternating patches of farmland and trees blurred past you. You
might see the lights in the houses, and imagine being home, sitting with a drink, glad the day was over. NPR was reporting a story about North Korea.
You then tell the story like this:
You saw sparks flaring in the distance. More and more. Brighter. “What the
hell is that?” you wonder. Perhaps a
truck is on fire. “North Korea today
launched a test. . .” You turn the volume down on the radio. The woods end on the far side, and in what’s left of the orange
glow of the setting sun, you see the truck. It’s rear wheel seems to disengage from it. “It’s the light,” you think, rubbing your eyes. You know you’re tired. Then the wheel passes the truck. You wonder if it will flip over and slide to a stop. It doesn’t. It bounces towards you in menacing twenty-foot leaps. It isn’t going to stop! You slam on the brakes, as it
passes a
few feet in front of you.
If you told it along those lines, you did several things that are what pacing is about. You controlled the time, creating distance between the beginning of the scene and the climax. You broke up the simple narrative with description and dialogue. There was a kind of reminiscence (being home,
having
a drink after work). The sentences were varied
in length and construction.
The structure of a book is like that. You have five tools: Narrative, Character, Description, Dialogue, and Style. You use these to tell your story, which usually has an inciting conflict. Alternate
these elements
(not
literally
in order and not
over
and
over)
to develop
each
scene,
and
scene
by
scene to finish your book. You need distance between the inciting moment and the climax.
Most people tell their stories in the third person by the omniscient author
John thought that the situation was peculiar.
Be sparing, let the character’s words
and actions show what John thought when it fits the story.
You could also tell your story in the first person:
I woke up to find myself on the cold cement floor of the city jail.
This form can add immediacy
and
excitement,
but remember
the
person telling
the
story cannot
know what
other characters are thinking or feeling, nor can things be described from someone else’s point of view.
Most people read for character, story, and style. Character, story, and style: sometimes, if you are lucky, you find all three in one book. It is
worth striving
for all three and finding the
perfect
pacing for
your story. However, if this becomes a juggling act with a few too many balls, let it go, but keep it all in mind when you edit and
revise your book.
You might think
of pacing on
several levels:
·
Globally – your story
has a beginning,
middle and end, you alternate
scenes
with more or
less action, more or
less description, to
build
towards the climax and dénouement.
·
Strategically
– you
vary
sections,
slow and fast, peaceful and stormy.
·
Tactically
– you vary the elements and sentence styles within
a scene.
The most important aspect of all of this is: if you don’t write your book, none of this matters. Therefore, think about these things while you are out for a walk with the dog, or thinking about what you will do tomorrow. Think about them when you reread your work. Ask if moving a scene from chapter three
to the beginning
might
not
draw the reader
in more quickly.
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